Originally Posted by: caponi14Hello there people,
I just want to share with you my new track. It's the first track i ever made and produced myself, and i would like some feedback and tell me if you like it or not :)
It's not quite done yet, and i plan on doing vocals. But i need a vocal microphone for that first :)
https://soundcloud.com/caponi14/come-down-to-town-undone
Cya ;)
Hey Caponi, been a long time.
My review:
Good (great): That driving main if is pretty great. I found myself grooving to that one. Had a good kick to it. Highlight of the songs.
Transition:
1) Verse/Chorus (riff) - In what I think is the verse with the more diminished SRV-type chords, the verse riff/melody is also pretty good but the transition from the above groovy riff directly to the chordy verse is to abrupt. You don't need (or want, in my opinion) a different bridge but you do need space between groovy riff and chordy verse. Space. You could even let the last note of the groovy riff hang there for a couple of beats, or vary an note ot string wiggle or something. You've got to have something that makes the tempo change make sense between the two sections.
2) Transition to the Breakdown section - Too abrupt to go from the riff to the slow burn breakdown section. Same thing apllies. Something that ties between the the two sections.
Breakdown section in general - It's cool overall and somewhat builds but should build up to that main groovy riff section following as something that will rip your head off in awesomeness. Listen to Steve Stevens 'Hellcats on the Highway' and listend to the section before that 3:03 mark....then how the riff kicks in after. It really makes the reprise of the main riff kick.
Overall: Very, very cool. The above are not complaints but something that takes this to the next level from a very good start/base. When I've arranged something, I always listen to what is missing. What is the spot where I can add space to let it breath or a variation so that the back and forth doesn't get stale.[br][br]Great job!!
